Radiography- the reflective PIE essay
Avoid adding a definition of slopes (too long a whole page! Cut off). You need to produce more images. Try to understand how the slopes work. The current image doesn’t say much give some context to these slopes. How do they work on your site? The red line does not say much. Give some reference of what is on top of these slopes?
How do they work across the site? Describe them with images ( section for examples). How do these slopes work with the street pattern, for example? What about water management? How these interact with the water map (talk to your colleagues). Instead of describing the future scenario, please illustrate it as well; please review the scenario. Some of the passages do not make good sense. Please cut the writing about other cities in Australia and concentrate on yoru site. If you want to illustrate an example of water management, do it more briefly and identify where these principles can be applied to your site.
